Wonderland Story

garirry · Post by **garirry** » Sat Apr 18, 2009 3:18 pm

There my story!

Once upon a time, Loof is outside for do a gift for Stincky. A police pick Loof
and points his gun and said: RAISE YOURS HANDS! Now Loof is in the prison.
When Stincky heard the police sound, Stincky go to the prison and release
Loof.

The End!

Please post a reply and say: "I love it","I don't love it",etc.
You can download my story in Microsoft World!

Muzozavr · Post by **Muzozavr** » Sat Apr 18, 2009 3:54 pm

That's not a story, that's a draft.
If you write out the details, it will become a story.
The draft is good, just... extremely short and there's no reason for all of that.

Welcome to Wonderland and the forum anyway!

Emerald141 · Post by **Emerald141** » Sat Apr 18, 2009 4:03 pm

If I might ask, what is the point of having to download a story when you put the entire thing in your post?

You had a lot of grammatical errors, but I'm really picky about that thing so don't worry.

Also, it's Microsoft WORD, not Microsoft WORLD.